Tuesday, 14 May 2013

Haunting Music

This story is written as a response to a prompt from Write on the Edge and Trifecta which are writing communities who set a prompt every week to encourage people to put finger to keyboard and engage in their imagination.  I thought I would have a go, as I need an encouragement to keep writing.  Here is the prompt and the story that followed.  I hope you enjoy it.


Image from Write on Edge
DELIBERATE
1: characterized by or resulting from careful and thorough consideration <a deliberate decision>
2: characterized by awareness of the consequences<deliberate falsehood>
3: slow, unhurried, and steady as though allowing time for decision on each individual action involved <a deliberate pace>


Elaine slow, deliberate and with great care checked and rechecked her internet banking.  The money was there.  It was a lot of money and that made it a lot easier.  Cancelling a wedding with a month to go was very expensive.  Selling her late grandfather's piano was a bit of a wrench, but it was time to let go of things.  If she had been less attached to her home, her keepsakes, her things then perhaps she would have listened to the little voice warning her that her relationship was not going well.  Being forced to look at evidence of Keith's affair had been a shock and it had made her look at a lot of things in a whole new light.  She was going to sell everything and travel the world.  She was going to sell everything and go back to college.  She was going to sell everything and, well, do something to change her life around. 
She looked at Steve.  Steve Adderson was once again acting as an agent for someone else. 
"You have the money?" he asked.
Elaine nodded.  "The piano is haunted, you know." She said.  "I've heard it sometimes at night."
Steve looked out of the window and gestured to the very specialist movers.  "It's not haunted, it's enchanted." he said. 
"Can I come with you?" Elaine asked impulsively. 
Steve looked at her thoughtfully.  "I need to check something anyway."  He rummaged in his pocket.  The small, dusty button looked incongruous coming out of the pocket of such a sharp suit.  Steve lifted the lid to show the keys and placed the button on top of the upright piano.  There was a click.  He pressed the button and suddenly a pair of ghostly hands were playing a wild, Hungarian waltz.  Steve nodded and removed the button.  The hands vanished. "Still want to come?"
"So the stories about my grandfather were true?" Elaine stared at the piano as the movers started to wrap it carefully.  "I am definitely coming!"

Despite my best intentions I am getting recurring characters.  You can check out more about them on the side bar here.  I hope you enjoy this story.  

36 comments:

  1. An enchanted piano is a very intriguing idea. Off to read more...

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    1. I hope you find it interesting. The back story has faerie in it, and they traditionally love music. Thank you for commenting. LM x

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  2. Every home should have one of those!

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    1. It could explain some of my son's practice lol Thank you for commenting LM x

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  3. I'm so glad she is going with him and that Steve seems to be an alright gentleman, if it a bit strange, but I guess one would have to be in his line of work.

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    1. Thank you for commenting. I am waiting to see what the characters do next - I didn't think that they would meet again! LM x

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  4. I love that the ghostly hands played a wild Hungarian waltz! It's little details like that, that make for excellent, imaginative writing! Now I wish my own piano was enchanted:)

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    1. I'm glad that the Hungarian waltz helped. I can't imagine an enchanted piano playing anything too restrained. Thank you for commenting. LM x

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  5. It's great to see Elaine's story continue - and what greater "new start" could there be than joining the strange journey of Steve Adderson. I loved the incongruity of the small dusty old button, and the matter of fact correction of "haunted" to "enchanted." More please.

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    1. Thank you for commenting. I am as much in the dark as anyone as to what the couple will do next. It's so much fun! LM x

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  6. Well done! Whatever will become of Steve, Elaine, and the haunted -- pardon us, enchanted -- piano? Write on, we'd like to know!

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    1. The characters are more interesting than I thought they would be - I shall enjoy finding out about them. Thank you for your encouragement and thank you for commenting. LM x

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  7. Oh, I like the idea of haunted/enchanted instruments! Very intriguing, indeed. I have a friend who canceled her wedding three weeks out. She said it was the best decision she ever made. Thanks for linking up!

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    1. Thank you for commenting. I can only imagine how horrifically complicated cancelling a wedding would be, but sometimes it's the best. LM x

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  8. 'Enchanted' sounds so much friendlier than 'haunted' :) This is a nice set up for more adventure...I'd be curious to read more!

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    1. These characters seem to be popping up whether I like it or not! Thank you for commenting.

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  9. This is magical and believable well done.

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    1. Thank you for commenting. I am glad you enjoyed it. LM x

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  10. What a ride she is going to have!

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    1. I think she is ready for it! Thank you for commenting LM x

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  11. Wow. My piano doesn't do that (pity). Nice piece! :)

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    1. After DS's piano practice I think ours might be cursed lol. Thank you for commenting LM x

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  12. Enchanted is better than haunted (:

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    1. Thank you for commenting. Steve likes to get things right lol LM x

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  13. Sounds like a plan , do elaborate on grandpa's stories .:)

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    1. I may come back to the grandfather who (in the sketched in background I have) got involved with the faerie in the 1930s. Thank you for commenting. I hope you enjoyed it. LM x

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  14. A great piece - I love the enchanted piano.

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  15. Thank you for commenting. I'm glad you like it. LM x

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  16. Love the continuation of this piece! And I love the enchanted piano and all the mystery surrounding it and Steve. So glad she's going with him -- can't wait to see where this goes!

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    1. I can't wait to see where it goes either - the prompts are so much fun. I am so glad you like it. Thank you for commenting LM x

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  17. Yes, keep writing. If you need encouragement, let me know. I'm a writing cheerleader!

    Your first paragraph reads a little rough. Try rephrasing and pulling the passive voice out of it if and when you revisit to edit, and that should clear it up. I love the idea of an enchanted piano. I've always thought so of them, especially old pianos. You delivered a charming merge of the prompts. Well done!

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    1. Thank you so much for the crit on this. I know that the passive voice is a real problem for me. I am still getting used to the word count of the challenges but I am finding them a great discipline. However it means that I am not as polished as I like. Thank you for giving me the heads up and thank you for commenting. LM x

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  18. A magic piano and a Hungarian waltz. (I love that you included that detail.) So romantic!

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    1. I am glad you like it. And I feel an enchanted piano should be Chopin or Liszt or even Khatchachurian and not Beethoven. There should be a swirl. Thank you for commenting. LM x

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  19. An enchanted piano! How lovely for her to discover that old family stories were, indeed, based in reality.

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    1. I found with a shock that my father's war stories were actually cold fact. It's nice to share that shock. Thank you for commenting. LM x

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