Sunday, 16 March 2014

Skimming Stones

Once again there is a wonderful prompt from Write on Edge, and this time I am using their picture


This is another in the Steve Adderson Story and you can read the challenges so far here .  I have enjoyed writing this so much, but it is getting harder and harder to keep them self contained.  I am challenging myself to finish the novel before I need to choose another thread of stories (I've got some ideas for that as well).  Thank you for the encouraging comments so far, they have really made a positive difference to me and I hope you enjoy this.  

The imp belched in Steve's ear.  "Someone's coming, boss."
Steve didn't look around.  He skimmed another stone across the lake.
"I see that the imp has its uses." Lord Marius said coolly.
"His name is Armani." Steve said, still gazing across the lake.  He picked up another stone.
"On account of my style, yer highness." Armani leered at Lord Marius.
Lord Marius took in the scruffy and torn miniature t-shirt, the filthy jeans and stained boots.  "I can see that only a normal could call you that."  The imp chuckled coarsely and spat onto the rocky shore.
Lord Marius walked closer to Steve.  "There is no door to a magical kingdom here." He said.
"I know." Steve selected another stone.
"You are not meeting anyone?" Lord Marius was fairly sure he knew the answer, but asked anyway.
"No." The stone skimmed for four bounces across the still water.  Steve bent to carefully select the next stone.
"But you are here." Lord Marius persisted.
"I wanted a bit of peace and quiet." Steve glanced a little bitterly first at Armani and then at Lord Marius.  "And Armani is quiet enough."
Lord Marius watched Armani roll one of his foul cigarettes.  "Elaine is in Iberia."
"Spain." Steve skimmed another stone.  It was only three bounces this time, but he seemed satisfied enough.  "She's gone to Spain with a friend."
Lord Marius shrugged.  "Spain used to be part of Iberia.  No matter.  Is she coming back?"
"To England, yes.  She's got a flat in Manchester and a good job offer."
"Is she coming back to you?" Lord Marius asked.
Armani took a long drag of his roll up and gave Lord Marius a disbelieving look.   As the imp oozed smoke Steve took his time selecting his next stone.  Eventually he glanced up at Lord Marius.  "No, she's not coming back to me." He said finally and skimmed the stone.  It shot five bounces across the water sending ripples across the stillness. 
"I am in contact with an elfen marriage guidance expert who..."
"Don't you dare!"Steve whirled around and glared at Lord Marius.  "Don't you even dare.  You think you know people, but you don't.  You don't understand emotions or love or caring and you don't understand me.  Elaine's gone!  That's it.  I can't force her back.  She couldn't cope with the magic, the elfen, the weirdness.  And even if I wanted to I can't walk away from that because of Armani.  And I don't.  This is who I am.  This is what I am.  And Elaine doesn't want it."  Steve sagged.  "I'm sorry.  I didn't mean to take it out on you."
"I understand." Lord Marius said quietly.  "And I also am sorry, sorry that your love affair failed."  He picked up a stone.  "We don't understand, really.  We try, but the elfen never quite understand the marvel that you are.  We do love, in our own way, but not in yours." And he skimmed his own stone across the cool water. 


I am a bit nervous mentioning this, but if you like Lord Marius he is a minor character in my novel 'The Forgotten Village' which is available free from Smashwords here.  It is compatible with practically every form of e-reader, and I hope you will feel able to dip in and enjoy.  Thank you for reading my take on Write on Edge's prompt.  

15 comments:

  1. That imp is delightful - and Armani is such a perfectly inappropriate name. This story was brilliant and fun, and the thought of an elfen marriage counsellor fills me with chills. More please.

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    1. I'm glad you like it! Thank you for commenting, and I intend to have a lot of fun writing that imp! LM x

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  2. You set the tone so well I could see it even without the picture prompt. I love the imp, the smoking, the glib comments. This definitely makes me interested in what happened before, and what will happen after. Nicely done.

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    1. Thank you for commenting, I'm glad you like it. I am also enjoying discovering what happens next. I hope you will enjoy it. LM x

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  3. Everyone should have such an imp. Poor Steve--he's stuck between worlds, isn't he?

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    1. I had a cat that was almost this bad. Poor Steve, it is so much more interesting to make characters suffer! Thank you for commenting. LM x

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  4. I like the details about skipping stones, like the number of skips carried along the story too.

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    1. Thank you for your comment, it's helpful to know what hits the mark. I am writing above my weight - I can never manage more than one! LM x

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  5. Your second-to last paragraph was exceptional - very emotive and powerful. I might have separated the last sentence into a paragraph of it's own however, and then just to add a little bit of "breathing space" between the outburst and the apology that followed - but otherwise, it was perfect!

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    1. Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. I went back and had a look and I agree, that extra space would have made a lot more impact. Thank you for commenting and for the insight. LM x

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  6. Armani is indeed an interesting character! I feel bad for Steve though, he sounds so very unhappy... and no elfen marriage counselor could make it better!
    -Tinkerbelle

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    1. Poor Steve, but I hope to give him some good news soon. Thank you for commenting. LM x

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  7. Congrats on the novel! That last bit is so telling. That humans and their love are a marvel. So very true.

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    1. Thank you for commenting. The distance between humans and elfen is something I like to write, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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  8. That one about elfen love being different from the marvel of human love was so beautifully written and I too am sad that Steve and Elaine are not meant to be together-sigh! Loved it.

    Congrats on your novel-am sure it is going to be a smashing hit!All the best :-)

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