Tuesday, 28 January 2014

Breathing In

This is a response to the Trifecta Challenge of 27 January 2014.  The challenge is to write 33 words on the subject of this picture.

Thomas Leuthard / Foter.com / CC BY

The easy, expansive space of the coffee shop after the dark confines of the parlour.  The bright, wide, window after the heavy, tasselled drapes.  The delicious chance for the mind to freely breathe.

This is definitely the hardest challenge I have tried so far.   

32 comments:

  1. Beautifully concise and evocative - you've painted a real scene and character in a handful of words.

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    1. Thank you for commenting. I'm glad you like the scene. LM x

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  2. The result didn´t look like it was hard word, Lyssa. Lovely contrasts depicted here and your reader breathes freely with her in that last sentence. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing!

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    1. Thank you so much for commenting. I am glad you liked it. Thank you for setting the challenge (only 33 words - it nearly killed me lol!) LM x

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  3. You say more than what's on the page. I think you've done well with this one... I've drawn a blank.

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    1. Thank you for commenting and thank you for the kind remarks. I took this as a beasting in the writing gym. I found it incredibly hard. Thank you again. LM x

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  4. "for the mind to freely breathe." I like this.

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  5. This made me think of the old Virgina Slims ad: 'You've come a long way, baby!' In a good way. I love the contrast and the freely breathing mind.

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    1. I'm really glad you like it, There has been such a shift over the last half century Thank you for commenting. LM x

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  6. It was a hard challenge but you really did a great job. I like it :)


    Ally

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  7. i love how, in just a few words, you compared the two different places. nicely done, Lyssa.

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    1. I'm glad you liked it. I was reminded of how I spread out when I get a chance. Thank you for commenting LM x

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  8. that was exquisite. reading it i wouldn't have guessed you had any trouble at all. (;

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  9. Thank you for commenting, and for being so kind. I'm glad you liked it. LM x

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  10. The juxtaposition of the two places was perfect as a visual. Very nice!

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  11. I love how you compared the two places. Awesome! Great imagery ♥

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  12. Beautifully contrasted-well done:-)

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  13. Love the contrasts. And that last line is perfect. Nicely done!

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  14. I got the very real sense of relief from the life in the parlour! I agree with Ted. I think you have made a much larger statement that your 33 words would, otherwise, imply. Very well done.

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind comment. The sprawl of he study material seemed so expansive and that led to the contrast. I'm glad you liked it. LM x

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  15. Love this! I like that it can be taken in a historical context, or in a personal one. All in all, a beautiful piece.

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  16. It's all about finding your happy place. Great work!

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    1. Thank you for commenting, it means a lot to me, especially from you. I am glad you like it. LM x

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  17. I agree with all the others - you said so much in these 33 words, and the comparison was really vivid. I could feel the difference in the two places.

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    1. I am glad you like it, and feel very flattered with the positive reaction. Thank you for commenting. LM x

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