My first attempt at a prompt from Light and Shade Challenge. I took the prompt from the quote, 'A dream can poison sleep,' from Mutability by Percy Blyshe Shelly. It was harder than I thought it would be.
Cassie
tried to get back to sleep. The dream
was haunting her again. She focused on
her breathing. She mustn't wake Jim next
to her. She mentally snuggled back in to
the dream.
"Cassie,
are you awake?"
Cassie
rolled over to see her husband. "Go
back to sleep, Jim." She said softly.
"It's
that dream again, isn't it? I can always
tell."
Cassie
stretched to see the bedside clock. It
said 2.17am. "It's late Jim, go
back to sleep. You have a heavy day in
front of you."
"So
do you." Jim sat up and rubbed a hand over his weary face. "Listen, I know you have trouble getting
back to sleep after that dream. Why
don't we go down into the kitchen for some hot milk."
Cassie
trailed after him. The kitchen was cold
and hard after the soft bed. "You
don't need to do this, Jim. Honestly,
I'll be fine."
Jim
put two mugs of milk in the microwave.
"Should I add a little nutmeg?"
Cassie
shook her head. "I still don't like
nutmeg." She smiled. "But
thank you anyway."
"This
dream, it's almost every night." Jim was watching the microwave but
suddenly turned around to look hard at Cassie, standing dreamy eyed. "We should go to the doctor. I could come in with you and help you
explain. I know you have trouble talking
to doctors."
Cassie
shook her head firmly. If she took
sleeping pills she could lose her dream.
"Why don't I stay down here?
I can read for a bit and get ready for sleep. You can rest in bed."
"You
know I can't sleep if you aren't next to me." The microwave pinged and Jim
pulled out the hot milk, giving it a quick stir. "Are you sure that you won't have some
nutmeg? I'll add some anyway."
"If
you add it I won't drink it."
Cassie wondered why it was so hard to have milk without nutmeg.
"It
would just be better for you." Jim grumbled. The nutmeg hovered over the milk for a
moment, then he took it away. "I
could go with you to a dream analyst.
Some of them are really good. I
know a few people who have used them."
"I
don't think so." Cassie said, sipping her milk.
"We
can drink the milk together in bed." Jim suggested. He led the way back to the bedroom. As they slid into the cooling sheets he
frowned. "We have to get this dream sorted out. I can't keep waking like this."
Cassie
lay still beside him, listening to his breathing almost instantly slip into the
slow, regular sighs of sleep. Jim could
never stay awake for more than a minute.
Then she stared into the dark and slid back to her dream. She was walking again in the golden sunlight
with blossom in the trees and the birds singing. She lay down on the soft, warm river bank and
listened to the river chuckling. And she
was all alone.
That is a very good piece. I like how even though they had their disagreements and squabbles the most terrifying dream for her was that she was alone.
ReplyDeleteThat is a very good piece. I like how even though they had their disagreements and squabbles the most terrifying dream for her was that she was alone.
ReplyDeleteI'm really glad you like it, and thank you so much for commenting, especially on this first Challenge LM x
DeleteI like this piece. I like it so much - I got involved to the point of being a little irritated with him for pushing the nutmeg. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThank you for commenting. I'm very flattered that you got sucked in, what a compliment! LM x
DeleteEnjoyed your story. Irritating man..geez. Thanks for the invitation! Patricia (high five and raspberries)
ReplyDeleteIt's good to see you! I'm glad you liked the story, by the end of it I was ready to strangle him. Thank you for commenting and I hope you can jump in and join us. LM x
DeleteI may have to hide my nutmeg now. I can understand why she would want to escape back into her dream.
ReplyDeleteI love nutmeg but then it isn't about me. Thank you for commenting. LM x
DeleteWonderfully dark and oppressive with just the sort of twist I like at the end.
ReplyDeleteI am so glad you like it, especially after all your support. LM x
DeleteWhat's with the man and his nutmeg anyway? How irritating! LOL... Seriously, this was very well written, and I can understand how she feels... a part of her is frightened by her dream, but the other part is more frightened to lose the dream. I've been there, and you captured me with your story. I wanted to find out more.
ReplyDeleteGod bless you,
Cheryl
I'm really glad you like it, it was a lot of fun to write. Thank you for commenting. LM x
DeleteThis story sucked me in and I was there in the kitchen, listening in on their conversation. The perfect ending. Twisty and making us think about what's going to happen next!
ReplyDeleteWhat does nutmeg taste like anyway?
I am so glad you liked it, and thank you for commenting. Nutmeg is a mild spice, I think you get it in mulled wine sometimes. I've only really seen it in sweet dishes but it can be a little harsh. I love it on rice pudding. LM x
DeleteKeep the nutmeg. I almost wanted to shout it or pull it from his hands.
ReplyDeletewith the way it was written , you are pulled in, not rushed, but sleepy too, waiting for what he'll say next and what she's dreaming of.
of course, she's dreaming of a place where no one badgers on about spices in her milk.
Well done.
Thank you, I had fun writing it, and thank you for the support of Light and Shade. It means a lot! LM x
DeleteLove that he whines about being woken up all the time, but can get back to sleep instantly. Glad she has a place to dream (nutmeg free).
ReplyDeleteI liked how most of the piece was dialogue *about* the dream, rather than description of the dream itself. It made the eventual little peek into the dream just that much more tantalizing. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteWell done. Thank you.
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